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Thursday, November 10, 2011

Flash Fiction Friday #2 - Surrender...

Woohoo! It's my second Flash Fiction Friday with the Flashers writing group. Enjoy! ;)

Flash Fiction Friday - Writing challenge based on a picture prompt. One picture to inspire one hundred words (no more, no less).
 

 
I unlocked the door, slipped off my heels, and quietly padded to the bedroom. While he slept, I planned to slip in, crawl under the covers and take my lover into my mouth, sucking him awake and showing him just how much I missed him.


“Shh.” A deep voice hissed. “Where is she?”


“Not home.”
 
Confused, I peered through the crack in the door to see a large hand gripping his chiseled chest roughly.
 
“You're lucky.” The voice growled in his ear. I gasped, feeling the world crash down as my lover's eyelashes fluttered in surrender... 

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22 comments:

Katie Harper said...

You did brilliantly Luna!! Now, if I were her, I'd stay and watch....then get pissed.

Bonni S. said...

Uh oh trouble in paradise. She better kick him to the curb if he's cheating. Loved your FFF post!

Unknown said...

Oh no he didn't. She needs to get revenge!

Erika Badass said...

Luna that was fantastic! and OH My God No he didn't!! I hate cheaters!!

She better watch, then kick their collective asses when they're naked!!

Erika

Jade said...

Oh good one!! And if I was her, I'll enter the room and enjoy both of them!
Great post!

Davee Jones said...

Beautiful and thrilling. Was this a male intruder having his way? The imagery is so diverse.

Anonymous said...

Oh man, this one was good. This one had me gasping. Oooo, I'd go get one my heels I just kicked off in the foyer and start beating some ass. *giggle* Nicely written Luna.

LunaEllaAldora said...

Thank you!! :)

He may have and he may not have...

I love how freeing these challenges are for each writer, but even more so the interpretation of each reader! ;)

Been there, done that. Didn't catch him in the act, but his guilty conscience gave me the sordid details, and first love's touch left a jagged crack in my heart for quite some time.

I don't even recognize the fragile girl I once was.

Lisa Worrall said...

Ooooh - you did a fab job honey :)
Always slightly disconcerting to find your partner cheating on you...but with the same sex? I'm with Katie, I'd watch through the door and then kick 'em out.

Luna Ella Aldora said...

Thanks Lisa! No chance of watching through the door...much more "seedy" than that. It was a very confusing time. I'd say he was on a path to self discovery and had he been honest with me, I would have dealt with it and helped him. But it ended up being a path of self destruction, with no regard for safety and the blame was placed on me by people in his life. The nerve!

Still boggles my mind that his betrayal left a bigger hurt than the deceit in my marriage, the loss of trust, and living one big lie with a stranger. I suppose it could have been because the former had been my first love and was just a confused boy, in the end.

Or maybe it's as simple as after bringing a child into this world, nothing and no one will ever matter as much as she does!

LunaEllaAldora said...

A cheater, about to cheat, or might Davee be onto something? She sees a look of surrender, but is it possible it's a look of surrender knowing he'd kept his love safe?

All of these scenarios went through my mind...no right answer, although one is the closest to what I had in mind.

I never knew hundred-word limit challenges could be so sexy and enigmatic as these flash fictions are! ;)

Anonymous said...

Oh wow! If I was her I'd stay and join, then get mad. Just so I could say I've had two men at once. LOL Great FFF!

Lee Brazil said...

I got the protective vibe- He's willing to stand between her and danger- hopefully she'll get help and save the day!

Awesome post, Luna!

Lindsey said...

Someone's in trouble. Great post.

LunaEllaAldora said...

Thanks! I won't give anything away until everyone has commented. ;)

Sherri Hayes said...

Oh wow. So not something you want to come home and find. Nice FFF. :)

Benjamin T. Russell said...

Oh Luna, you've created a FFF post with some double jeopardy. I'm like Katie, she should stay there and watch to see if he'll do all the thing with his lover that he said he never do with her. LOVED IT - This is a good one.

Unknown said...

I loved it Luna. I'd watch too. Then I'd probably drop kick them.

VenusBookluvr said...

oh wow, I feel so bad for her.

Havan said...

Oh - so many scenarios that this can lead to - awesome!

LunaEllaAldora said...

Thanks everyone! <3


Because of going through the painful cheating scenario, I did opt for the intruder/protector slant with this one.

Have any of you ever walked in on a partner cheating or gotten that kind of blow before?

How did YOU react?

~Luna

Author Cyril J. Michael said...

I would hate to be in her shoes. I'm glad it's never happened to me.
Great post.